Mike,
You must be a speed reader! And you survived a day of reading this stuff, without pictures? Wow!
This is, after all, only the first draft. I would think there's a lot of tuning needed; not just the fine variety. Some of the newer stuff is a bit better but I feel there is no style to the writing and it is all too dry. Oh well, with your help and others---calling Tom Paul--it can improve greatly. Oh, and I know you can visualize how the drawings, ground photos and Craig's aerials will enhance the effect.
After I finish the important chapter on Huntingdon Valley I will send the latest version to you. We shall discuss at Lancaster sometime soon. Well, back to writing....